Yesterday, I discussed how a bad press release headline can kill your book promotion efforts before they’ve begun. But I’d like to provide some actual examples of what headlines do right, and what they do wrong.
So here’s the first in what will be an ongoing series:
What this headline does right:
- Gives the genre: science fiction adventure
- Gives the intended audience: young readers
- Tells us that this is a series of books, so either the author already has books published, or they intend to publish more, i.e., we should all keep paying attention to them
- It’s concise, just 67 characters, meaning most of it will appear in search engine results pages
What this headline does wrong:
- Describing the book as fabulous
What makes a book fabulous? What makes this specific book fabulous? Is it fabulously well-written? Is there fabulous characterization, or fabulous world-building? Is the plot fabulously paced?
Flowery adjectives can make a headline pop, but by leaving the description vague, this headline is effectively meaningless.
The first ten words tell me a lot about the What, which is great. But the final two give me no hint of Why I should care. Young adult sci-fi books are a dime a dozen right now, and this headline fails to stand out from the crowd.
That’s it for now. I’d be happy to hear anyone else’s thoughts on this headline or my critique. I’ll try to do one or two of these each month.